New song! Heavy!

[Chicky]

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I have spend the last couple of days putting together the track 'anemic'. It's still a demo, and i need another instrument really to complete the mix.

But anyway, everything is played, recorded and mixed by me. Comments?

[ThreeOhFour]

Sounds good - at points the guitars were a little too drone-y for my tastes, and the voice around 2:45 sounded a bit odd, but other than that I like it .

[miguel]

Hi, I think it lacks rythm, a faster tempo would do wonders to it giving a more rocky side to a monopaced track, I'm sorry to say but I got bored at half of it.
Again, I think it's only a matter of rythm because the instruments were well played.
The voice efects suit the style of the song but it doesn't variates much, the refrain has the same pitch only sung louder.
It's a good efort though, keep up the good work,
miguel

[Chicky]

The problem with the rhythm is mainly down to the drum track being too quiet, something i didn't notice untill about 5 hours ago!

Anyway the bass is being re-written, with the levels up as my bassist is doing his part tomorrow, working his fretboard wonders.

The lead guitar is being re-written with a lead solo coming into the mix from our new guitarist, which will lead to a lot more clarity coming into the song.

And i may well have myself a synth player, with some sample wonders and chimes over the verse i think it will really complete the mix.

Watch this space!

[Evil]

It's not bad. I know it's not finished, but I still have a few comments. Guitar is droney, but it's great for rhythm. That intro rhythm is lost in the distortion. I love the right channel guitar during the slow breakdown. I'd add some wah (or more if there is some) during the second chord when the riff goes up. There are some panning issues. The left channel guitar is too far left. Everything else feels like it's slightly right.

Vocally, the tone is nice during the heavy parts. But there are too many effects during the quiet parts. I know NIN is sort of a cliche sort of thing to model your music after, but he's got his shit down. Mr. Self Destruct balances not only amount of effect, but how "heavy" the lyrics are. There are many other tracks that do this, but I think Mr. Self Destruct has a much more obvious change.

But that lighter breakdown is awesome. It's not really along the same lines of style, but the song The First Vietnamese War by The Black Angels has a wicked guitar riff with wah, and something along those lines would be awesome over that breakdown. Here's the track from their website.

[Chicky]

Cheers eric!

Me and the bassist are going to spend a good few hours picking the track apart before we release it again, we've been writing a lot as there are some gigs booked so the full track has been a bit delayed.

That black angels song is pretty sweet

[Paper Carnival]

Very nice. Like other people said, the guitar sound could be better, though I like how it sounds after the first vocals come.

Speaking of vocals, I think they are perfect for the style.