Another Lighthouse!

[Ryan Timothy B]

Hey everyone.  This lighthouse is for the background challenge.  I'm not done yet, still working on a large portion of the image.  But I want some critique on the rust/oxidizing/painted look.  So give it a look, tell me what I'm doing wrong, cause I can't seem to think of a way to make it better looking.



Here's the reference:



As you can see the whole image isn't complete.  Still need railings, water, top of the lighthouse, shadows, better sky, detailed cement, glare, etc.  Just tell me what I can do to improve the rust look?  I'd rather know now, while I'm still currently working on it.  (the base in water will be rounded)

[Evil]

The rust looks pretty good. I'd adjust the door shape a bit and fix some of the metal sheet shapes a bit. I think that if you added a highlight to the edges of the sheets, it would make the rust look better. The dark lines look out of place. Or even make them less dark in some spaces, like on your reference photo.

[Ryan Timothy B]

Hey thanks.  I'll change the lines in most places where the rust is passing from sheet to sheet.
What do you mean by adjusting the door shape a bit?  Make it a little more 3d (with an angle on the left to show a little depth in the metal?), or less freehand crooked? lol

[Evil]

Well, the door seems a little big and a little mis-shapen. That one sliver of metal is distracting, and I would move the whole door to the right so that it "fits" better.

[Ryan Timothy B]

How's this?

[Babar]

The base where it's touching the water would be circular, not a straight line.

[Ryan Timothy B]

Yeah I mentioned that already.  I'll touch that up when I get to the slightly wavy water.

[miguel]

I think it would not be possible to see through those small circular  holes/(windows?)  on top. I guess the viewer had to be on a very precise spot to do that.
Ah, and looking at the way your lighthouse is looking I'm afraid I'm not even gonna try and post mine!
great job!

[Ryan Timothy B]

No way Miguel, post yours.  You never know, I might not even finish it. 

Yeah those windows aren't complete yet, including top windows.  I was just getting some critique on the rust look.  Thanks though.

[Stupot]

Interestingly, your version tilts forward where the reference photo tilts backwards... not that it matters, I think you're doing a very good job.

[Ryan Timothy B]

Yeah I needed 'area' for the ego to be able to walk, otherwise it would be just a picture and not a background.

[Nagania]

no, i think the rust is good.  as soon as you finish everything else on the image, you'll see it too!